I really like this poem. There is something about the line breaks and the interplay between title and line and the reveal. It is a very punchy little poem...so funny and so matter of fact.
It actually somewhat reminds me of Shalom Auslander's poems inspired by WCW's "This is just to say." See below. -----
1. I'm sorry you're overweight And drinking And feeling like everything in your life Is doomed to failure But this is probably why Mom said I was her favorite.
2. It sucks, little doe That I hit you With my car
But at least You weren't alive To watch the hunters Shoot your children
3. He was a trouble maker, okay And didn't know when To shut up
Still, We never would have killed him If we'd known he was the Lord
That's a really good poem, Zach, thanks for sharing it. I read it about a week ago when you first commented it, but I just reread it now and finally, really *got* it, and I'm flattered that I reminded you of it.
I really like this poem. There is something about the line breaks and the interplay between title and line and the reveal. It is a very punchy little poem...so funny and so matter of fact.
ReplyDeleteIt actually somewhat reminds me of Shalom Auslander's poems inspired by WCW's "This is just to say." See below.
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1.
I'm sorry you're overweight
And drinking
And feeling like everything
in your life
Is doomed to failure
But this is probably why
Mom said
I was her favorite.
2.
It sucks, little doe
That I hit you
With my car
But at least
You weren't alive
To watch the hunters
Shoot your children
3.
He was a trouble maker, okay
And didn't know when
To shut up
Still,
We never would have killed him
If we'd known he was the Lord
That's a really good poem, Zach, thanks for sharing it. I read it about a week ago when you first commented it, but I just reread it now and finally, really *got* it, and I'm flattered that I reminded you of it.
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