Thursday, January 21, 2010

Traction in Slick Conditions

sounds like a dirty phrase
but was actually overheard
in a car commercial.

2 comments:

  1. I really like this poem. There is something about the line breaks and the interplay between title and line and the reveal. It is a very punchy little poem...so funny and so matter of fact.

    It actually somewhat reminds me of Shalom Auslander's poems inspired by WCW's "This is just to say." See below.
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    1.
    I'm sorry you're overweight
    And drinking
    And feeling like everything
    in your life
    Is doomed to failure
    But this is probably why
    Mom said
    I was her favorite.

    2.
    It sucks, little doe
    That I hit you
    With my car

    But at least
    You weren't alive
    To watch the hunters
    Shoot your children

    3.
    He was a trouble maker, okay
    And didn't know when
    To shut up

    Still,
    We never would have killed him
    If we'd known he was the Lord

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  2. That's a really good poem, Zach, thanks for sharing it. I read it about a week ago when you first commented it, but I just reread it now and finally, really *got* it, and I'm flattered that I reminded you of it.

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